"I Will Stay With You" is a heartfelt love song, but like most of my love songs I wanted a harsh and sad edge to it, and I think I succeeded. It is (of course) not quite finished -- it needs some variation in the chords, as well as an intro and bridge, but I think I'm on the right track.
I almost ran off the rails at one point, in that as I was singing the melody I kept hearing a similar song in my head (not one of mine, not saying whose) and it was a genuine struggle not to veer off into the same progression on some of the phrases. But ultimately I succeeded.
Other than that, there really isn't much more to say, except I like what the bridge says about me 'cause that's exactly how I feel sometimes. Not sure I ever could have expressed it in mere words.
As always, suggestions are welcome, as are your own whacks at this and any of the other songs.
I Will Stay With You
I like it :)
ReplyDeleteWhen is the Cd coming out so I can buy one.
Is that you Mrs. Barry?
ReplyDeleteI can't even guess at when the CD will be completed and available, but I'm targeting two years.
Sorry to be so slow getting something in on this. It's been a long 2 months with Shannon's wedding and then she left this past Wednesday so there's been much to do helping her get ready.
ReplyDeleteAs for the song, I like it. However, the melody and minor key put it at risk of being a dirge when it's really a strong sentiment (I'll stick with you through it all). My suggestion would be to speed it up a bit so it's mid-tempo rather than ballad tempo. And I would give the guitar/bass/drums some emphasis on 2 and 4 to make it drive a bit as well.
Think of Bruce's "Brilliant Disguise", but not quite that fast, and I think you'll see where I'm headed.
Just my 2 cents--or was that a nickle entry?
That is in fact what one might call solid gold, Dave, as usual. I will put your suggestions to work.
ReplyDeleteHey there! I would add to Dave's comments that along with tempo, consider putting the bridge in a major key. You may have to play with that a bit, but you could drop down to an E major and toy around that. Or do the REM riff where you play the E major and run up to 2nd, 5th, frets wth open E/B strings. As for lyrics, you know that ain't my thang, but toss some cigarettes or rain in there and you've got gold Jerry.
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